My mum is a very kind person that I have seen so far.She cared for my study,and prepare much food to suit my appetite.She is such a strict woman that I feel deeply.My mum is a business woman,she stayed up with me until night .Then otherwise, I should sleep that time.I love my mum,and I believe my future .Believe it or not,my mum is my important role im my life. Thankyou for mum's attention.

是要批改作文吗。首先是注意时态。

好比cared for这里为什么用过去式，而后面prepare就用了一般时态。

其次是注意短语的用法。

好比play an important role.

建议，不要这么早就主动的去写作，多读，多背诵为佳。

I love my mother andfather~~

建议，不要这么早就主动的去写作，多读，多背诵为佳。

我已经提醒过你了。这不，又有人提醒你了。

又：即使想写，也要先模仿课文去写，先不要搞创作了。

This composition is written many days ago,so I didn't care about it.,I f you have some suggestion ,plz tell me ,iI 'll correct it to please everyone.

This composition is written many days ago,so I didn't care about it.,I f you have some suggestion ,plz tell me ,iI 'll correct it to please everyone.

This composition is written many days ago,so I didn't care about it.,I f you have some suggestion ,plz tell me ,iI 'll correct it to please everyone.

既然是perfecy的作文，评论一下啊

My mum is a very kind person that I have seen so far.

（建议用the kindest最高以强调，给妈妈用最好的词没有问题）

（so far不好，目前为止？难道以后就不乐？用ever,i've ever seen)

She cared for my study,and prepare much food to suit my appetite.

（并列式，最好时态一样。当然我觉得你觉得是过去发生的，就全用过去式了。即使你现在不读书了，她现在还在为你做早餐，可以放些时间副词或状语。最好是一样的时态，要不然容易把人搞晕）

She is such a strict woman that I feel deeply.（感觉后面没写完呢 i deeply feel my share of it as her daughter）

My mum is a business woman,she stayed up with me until night .

(两个句子，中间用句号，或者用连词and,在这里似乎是转折选but，最好时前面用although)

（stay up我个人理解是熬夜了，until almost midnight/late night)

Then otherwise, I should sleep that time.

(otherwise i should fall asleep earlier)

I love my mum,and I believe my future .

(后面这句的意思不明确 to reward?)

Believe it or not,my mum is my important role in my life.

(themostimportant role)

Thank you for mum's attention.

(thanks for mum's kind attention)

既然是perfecy的作文，评论一下啊

My mum is a very kind person that I have seen so far.

（建议用the kindest最高以强调，给妈妈用最好的词没有问题）

（so far不好，目前为止？难道以后就不乐？用ever,i've ever seen)

She cared for my study,and prepare much food to suit my appetite.

（并列式，最好时态一样。当然我觉得你觉得是过去发生的，就全用过去式了。即使你现在不读书了，她现在还在为你做早餐，可以放些时间副词或状语。最好是一样的时态，要不然容易把人搞晕）

She is such a strict woman that I feel deeply.（感觉后面没写完呢 i deeply feel my share of it as her daughter）

My mum is a business woman,she stayed up with me until night .

(两个句子，中间用句号，或者用连词and,在这里似乎是转折选but，最好时前面用although)

（stay up我个人理解是熬夜了，until almost midnight/late night)

Then otherwise, I should sleep that time.

(otherwise i should fall asleep earlier)

I love my mum,and I believe my future .

(后面这句的意思不明确 to reward?)

Believe it or not,my mum is my important role in my life.

(themostimportant role)

Thank you for mum's attention.

(thanks for mum's kind attention)

既然是perfecy的作文，评论一下啊

My mum is a very kind person that I have seen so far.

（建议用the kindest最高以强调，给妈妈用最好的词没有问题）

（so far不好，目前为止？难道以后就不乐？用ever,i've ever seen)

She cared for my study,and prepare much food to suit my appetite.

（并列式，最好时态一样。当然我觉得你觉得是过去发生的，就全用过去式了。即使你现在不读书了，她现在还在为你做早餐，可以放些时间副词或状语。最好是一样的时态，要不然容易把人搞晕）

She is such a strict woman that I feel deeply.（感觉后面没写完呢 i deeply feel my share of it as her daughter）

My mum is a business woman,she stayed up with me until night .

(两个句子，中间用句号，或者用连词and,在这里似乎是转折选but，最好时前面用although)

（stay up我个人理解是熬夜了，until almost midnight/late night)

Then otherwise, I should sleep that time.

(otherwise i should fall asleep earlier)

I love my mum,and I believe my future .

(后面这句的意思不明确 to reward?)

Believe it or not,my mum is my important role in my life.

(themostimportant role)

Thank you for mum's attention.

(thanks for mum's kind attention)

既然是perfecy的作文，评论一下啊

My mum is a very kind person that I have seen so far.

（建议用the kindest最高以强调，给妈妈用最好的词没有问题）

（so far不好，目前为止？难道以后就不乐？用ever,i've ever seen)

She cared for my study,and prepare much food to suit my appetite.

（并列式，最好时态一样。当然我觉得你觉得是过去发生的，就全用过去式了。即使你现在不读书了，她现在还在为你做早餐，可以放些时间副词或状语。最好是一样的时态，要不然容易把人搞晕）

She is such a strict woman that I feel deeply.（感觉后面没写完呢 i deeply feel my share of it as her daughter）

My mum is a business woman,she stayed up with me until night .

(两个句子，中间用句号，或者用连词and,在这里似乎是转折选but，最好时前面用although)

（stay up我个人理解是熬夜了，until almost midnight/late night)

Then otherwise, I should sleep that time.

(otherwise i should fall asleep earlier)

I love my mum,and I believe my future .

(后面这句的意思不明确 to reward?)

Believe it or not,my mum is my important role in my life.

(themostimportant role)

Thank you for mum's attention.

(thanks for mum's kind attention)

既然是perfecy的作文，评论一下啊

My mum is a very kind person that I have seen so far.

（建议用the kindest最高以强调，给妈妈用最好的词没有问题）

（so far不好，目前为止？难道以后就不乐？用ever,i've ever seen)

She cared for my study,and prepare much food to suit my appetite.

（并列式，最好时态一样。当然我觉得你觉得是过去发生的，就全用过去式了。即使你现在不读书了，她现在还在为你做早餐，可以放些时间副词或状语。最好是一样的时态，要不然容易把人搞晕）

She is such a strict woman that I feel deeply.（感觉后面没写完呢 i deeply feel my share of it as her daughter）

My mum is a business woman,she stayed up with me until night .

(两个句子，中间用句号，或者用连词and,在这里似乎是转折选but，最好时前面用although)

（stay up我个人理解是熬夜了，until almost midnight/late night)

Then otherwise, I should sleep that time.

(otherwise i should fall asleep earlier)

I love my mum,and I believe my future .

(后面这句的意思不明确 to reward?)

Believe it or not,my mum is my important role in my life.

(themostimportant role)

Thank you for mum's attention.

(thanks for mum's kind attention)

什么破网啊，害得我点了这么多次

楼上相当激情，连发了3弹

看得我头都晕了。看到这种分析的文章就头大

看得我头都晕了。看到这种分析的文章就头大