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I know, I’m not as beautiful as her, and have a happy family. Perhaps there's a problem here.In thatsentence, You mean you don't have a happy family?But why?Ijust don't understand. |
Some words and expressions are obscure. e.g."extremely", "turns into"... Give you some advice: to read a lot and to take in more. |
1 Use past tense to narrate a story. 2 changes her life extremely->changed her life entirely/completely 3 For at one time we are both unnoticed by the persons who we care very much and live in our own world alone. -> For we are both ordinary people, without outstanding beauty, talent or wealth. 4 with good manners, strong will and confidence-> with elegance, confidence and ambitions/determination. 5 you mentioned the doctor as your career, but only once. what i suggest is, either you talk more about it, or you avoid it. |
thank you very much. my poor english!!!!! ok i will read a lot and to take in more thank you |