这是我根据新概念第二册33课课文改写的，请大家帮我挑挑错!

Nearlya week passed before the boy was able to explain what had happened to him. In a very hot afternoon, he went into a large funk hole and was caught in an accident of power cut. Towards evening all lights in the hole turned off suddenly and the ventilators stopped working at the same time. There were many turnoffs in the hole and the boy could not find the way out without light. Then he fumbled to the exit after spending the whole night in the funk hole. The funk hole was not very large but he lost his way. Early next morning he saw a light ahead. He knew he was near the exit because the light was a sunlight outside. On arriving at the exit he reeled to the people who were doing morning exercises on the square near the funk hole. That was all he remembered. When he woke up a day later he found himself in hospital.

Someone wondered why the boy was in hospital, for he seemed to have not been hurt.

It was a very hot afternoon, and it was getting hot and frowsty in the funk hole after the ventilators stopped working, so the boy had a bad heatstroke. The boy went into the hole without food and water, because he had not intended to stay there for a long time. He felt very tired and was very hungry and thirsty after fumbling whole night in the hole. But the most important reason was that he had been scared too much by staying in the dark hole alone for such a long time, so he had no sooner been out of the darkness than he fainted.

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Good work.

2# Nicoffee

thank you for your encouragement.

In a very hot afternoon 这里你得用介词　on,如果单纯指在下午就用in the afternoon，如果有特殊一个下午　用on

ＬＺ在写英文的时候　在语序上要有所调整　给我感觉你还是中文式的思维在写英语文章　

on the whole,you did a good job...

4# ilovesunny

thank you, ilovesunny.

我确实是在用中文思维写英文，可是不知道怎样纠正。你指出的这个问题我会记住的，特定的某个时间都用on吗？

按老师的修改意见订正如下：

Nearlya week passed before the boy was able to explain what had happened to him. On a very hot afternoon, he went into a large funk hole and was caught in an accident of power cut. Towards evening all lights in the hole turned off suddenly and the ventilators stopped working at the same time. There were many turnoffs in the hole and the boy could not find the way out without light. Then he fumbled to the exit after spending the whole night in the funk hole. The funk hole was not very large but he lost his way. Early next morning he saw a light ahead. He knew he was near the exit because the light was a sunlight outside. On arriving at the exit he reeled to the people who were doing morning exercises on the square near the funk hole. That was all he remembered. When he woke up a day later he found himself in hospital.

Someone wondered why the boy was in hospital, for he seemed to have not been hurt.

It was a very hot afternoon, and it was getting hot and frowsty in the funk hole after the ventilators stopped working, so the boy had a bad heatstroke. The boy went into the hole without food and water, because he had not intended to stay there for a long time. He felt very tired and was very hungry and thirsty after fumbling whole night in the hole. But the most important reason was that he had been scared too much by staying in the dark hole alone for such a long time, so he had no sooner been out of the darkness than he fainted.